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I have fallen,
A great fall.

The cry of birds
The howl of wolves
The whimper of dogs
They encompass me
Air rushes though my hair

I see a black mass
Before me
I brace up

Deeper, deeper
My being sunk
My soul singed
An everlasting furnace
Grasped my heart

Lub Dub, Lub Dub
Sang the chorus
An orchestra led by me
Directed by me
Strung by me

This is my path
My future.
I have built the bridge,
Connecting different worlds,
And I alone shall walk it.

Mistakes were made
Friends were lost
Regret still lingers on
Like a foul disease
A wound,
A deep wound

But I shall overcome.

Accompanied by none
This is my journey
A turbulent voyage
Through a river of grief, a sea of terror, an ocean of doubt
A tempestuous expedition
Through a field of failure, a plain of aguish, a forest of remorse

I shall overcome.

I have drowned
Yet
I have lived
And
I have become
Stronger.

Fear?
I fear nothing.

I shall overcome
Everything.
EDIT: I made a mistake accidentally in line 5, I fixed it now. Sorry. 

WOOOO!!! Cracked 100 views on this poem :D

And thank you  EmbraceTheDisco for the feature in Poetry That Means A Lot :happybounce:  - My first ever feature!
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Pternoha Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, that is interesting! 

Although I am usually not a big fan of that kind of style (as I feel it is often not done correctly and just comes across as needlessly disjointed), I must admit it works quite nicely here. Indeed it gives the poem a very frantic undertone, which compliments very nicely its content.

I actually really like the actual content of the poem, as it is actually something to what I do end up writing from time to time (what I would cynically refer to as "pep-talk-poems").

So in the end, I would say it quite a nice poem, even though I do feel you chopped up sentences a bit too much but meh... That mostly comes down to aesthical preferences I guess :D
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ghero97 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm really glad you liked it. This poem was interesting to make, especially the structure but as you pointed out I may have overdone the emphasis through enjambment a bit too much haha :)

Nevertheless, thanks for the nice comment :happybounce: 
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Pternoha Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome!

Do not mind me too much as to the enjambement thing, for some reason I cannot stand them even though I reckon they legimately useful sometimes. Might have to do with me restraining myself from making enjambements when I began because it is somewhat of an "easy" way out, especially for beginners.

I do try to get myself to use some from time to time nowadays though....
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Fameisdead Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Clap  Fantastic poem!!! 
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ghero97 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :D
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Fameisdead Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome! :3
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