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I have fallen,
A great fall.
The cry of birds
The howl of wolves
The whimper of dogs
They encompass me
Air rushes though my hair
I see a black mass
Before me
I brace up
Deeper, deeper
My being sunk
My soul singed
An everlasting furnace
Grasped my heart
Lub Dub, Lub Dub
Sang the chorus
An orchestra led by me
Directed by me
Strung by me
This is my path
My future.
I have built the bridge,
Connecting different worlds,
And I alone shall walk it.
Mistakes were made
Friends were lost
Regret still lingers on
Like a foul disease
A wound,
A deep wound
But I shall overcome.
Accompanied by none
This is my journey
A turbulent voyage
Through a river of grief, a sea of terror, an ocean of doubt
A tempestuous expedition
Through a field of failure, a plain of aguish, a forest of remorse
I shall overcome.
I have drowned
Yet
I have lived
And
I have become
Stronger.
Fear?
I fear nothing.
I shall overcome
Everything.
A great fall.
The cry of birds
The howl of wolves
The whimper of dogs
They encompass me
Air rushes though my hair
I see a black mass
Before me
I brace up
Deeper, deeper
My being sunk
My soul singed
An everlasting furnace
Grasped my heart
Lub Dub, Lub Dub
Sang the chorus
An orchestra led by me
Directed by me
Strung by me
This is my path
My future.
I have built the bridge,
Connecting different worlds,
And I alone shall walk it.
Mistakes were made
Friends were lost
Regret still lingers on
Like a foul disease
A wound,
A deep wound
But I shall overcome.
Accompanied by none
This is my journey
A turbulent voyage
Through a river of grief, a sea of terror, an ocean of doubt
A tempestuous expedition
Through a field of failure, a plain of aguish, a forest of remorse
I shall overcome.
I have drowned
Yet
I have lived
And
I have become
Stronger.
Fear?
I fear nothing.
I shall overcome
Everything.
EDIT: I made a mistake accidentally in line 5, I fixed it now. Sorry.
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WOOOO!!! Cracked 100 views on this poem
And thank you EmbraceTheDisco for the feature in Poetry That Means A Lot
- My first ever feature! © 2014 - 2024 ghero97
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Well, that is interesting!
Although I am usually not a big fan of that kind of style (as I feel it is often not done correctly and just comes across as needlessly disjointed), I must admit it works quite nicely here. Indeed it gives the poem a very frantic undertone, which compliments very nicely its content.
I actually really like the actual content of the poem, as it is actually something to what I do end up writing from time to time (what I would cynically refer to as "pep-talk-poems").
So in the end, I would say it quite a nice poem, even though I do feel you chopped up sentences a bit too much but meh... That mostly comes down to aesthical preferences I guess
Although I am usually not a big fan of that kind of style (as I feel it is often not done correctly and just comes across as needlessly disjointed), I must admit it works quite nicely here. Indeed it gives the poem a very frantic undertone, which compliments very nicely its content.
I actually really like the actual content of the poem, as it is actually something to what I do end up writing from time to time (what I would cynically refer to as "pep-talk-poems").
So in the end, I would say it quite a nice poem, even though I do feel you chopped up sentences a bit too much but meh... That mostly comes down to aesthical preferences I guess